Portfolio: Second Semester

Student ID: 07104

Until December 22

Portfolio for Writing IV,
Section 1a


(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. Overview

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)

1.0. Essays

(See: Note 3, below.)

Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).

1.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates yy.mm.dd	¶	W	C	L	P	M
Website review 08.09.29 (375+ words)	Website Review: Let's take in Fresh English！	08.09.27	6	380	6	1	0	0
Favorite place(-s) 08.10.20 (450+ words)	Essay: ～～ my second home ～～	08.10.11	4	493	0	0	0	0
Mrs. Doubtfire 08.11.04 (500+ words)	MR2-01: "Mrs. Doubt" ― Live with Love and Humor ☆	08.11.01	5	452	4	0	0	0
Community life 08.11.17 (default length*)	Essay2-02: ~Walk in line~ (Community life)	08.11.16	6	610	0	0	0	0
Kumamoto's best-kept secrets 08.12.01 (5+ ¶¶)	Essay2-03: ○●Secret of Kumamoto●○	08.11.30	4	434	0	0	0	0
Learning with computers 2008.12.15 (6+ ¶¶)	Essay: Learning with computers!	08.12.12	7	503	0	0	0	0
Totals	---	---	32	2872	10	1	0	0

Key:

¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length

W: number of words

C: number of comments

L: number of links

P: number of photos or other graphics
M: number of other media included in post
*: "long enough to cover the ... [communities] you choose," Writing Studio Blog, Preparation for Next Essays, 2008.10.29)

1.2. Best Essay

Selection and Assessment: Which of those six assigned essays do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• I think the best essay in this semester is "Essay2-02: ~Walk in line~ (Community life)". It is because it shows the main points so clearly. Besides, it has a good conclusion paragraph. The readers can feel the march of time.

2.0. Comments

Showcase	Titles of posts with links	Dates of comments yy.mm.dd	Numbers of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*	0	-	-	-
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*	Mrs.doubt fire essay	08.11.04	88	"You share a great analysis especially in the third paragraph!" Specific praise
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*	MR2-01: "Mrs. Doubt" ― Live with Love and Humor ☆	08.11.05	88	"Which is more important for you, humor or love?" An interesting question.
2.4. Most comments on:	Titles of posts with link	Dates of posts yy.mm.dd	Total number of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*	Website Review: Let's take in Fresh English！	08.09.27	131	"The BBC site you elected is good and it's one of way to build up our English skill.It's nice idea,jam!" Friendly!
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	08.10.01	---	---
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	97	"Thank you for your all comments!" and answered all questions. Thankful and informative
2.4.2. Any of your other posts*	MR2-01: "Mrs. Doubt" ― Live with Love and Humor ☆	08.11.01	154	"your essay is really easy to read because first paragraph tells me what you want to write below paragraphs." So specific comment
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	08.11.12	---	---
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	46	"I...think...love is more important. Everything does have no meaning without love!" (answered a question and shared my opinion) Informative and thankful

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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes them good comments.

2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.

• My blog displays them at the top in a sidebar. It is because I want them to be encouragements for me that others look into my blog!
  

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

• I appreciated the comments which shows specific advice.
• The comments which refer to good points concretely became encouragements for me.
  

3.0. Book Reviews

3.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates (yy.mm.dd)	Words	Comments
Example:	Vampire Killer	07.05.16	39	1
2-01	BR2-01: The Joke Machine	08.08.01	147	0
2-02	BR2-02: Roman Adventure	08.08.05	133	0
2-03	BR2-03: Submarine Adventure	08.08.05	210	0
2-04	BR2-04: Chinese Adventure	08.08.08	161	0
2-05	BR2-05: Flood! ) -:	08.09.28	151	0
2-06	BR2-06: The Three Little Pigs （－：	08.09.28	108	0
2-07	BR2-07: The Fox and the Crow ( -- :	08.09.28	124	0
2-08	BR2-08: The Hare and the Tortoise ( - :	08.09.28	108	0
2-09	BR2-09: The Blue Eye ( - :	08.10.07	172	0
2-10	BR2-10: Superdog	08.10.19	194	0
2-11	BR2-11: Sara Says No!	08.11.14	245	0
2-12	BR2-12: The Umbrella	08.12.06	306	0
2-13	BR2-13: The Barcelona Game	08.12.17	444	0
2-14	BR2-14: Photo Finish	08.12.18	140	0
2-15	BR2-15:Shooting Stars	08.12.18	120	0
2-16	BR2-16: In the Frame	08.12.18	129	0
2-17	BR2-17: The Big Bag Mistake	08.12.20	156	0
2-18	BR2-18: THE LAST PHOTO	08.12.21	194	0
---	---	Totals:	3242	0

Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).

3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.
　　　　

・I think my best book review is "BR2-18: THE LAST PHOTO ". It is because it includes my opinion and questions, instead of a long story plot. Besides, it is so easy to read.

4.0. Blog Layout, Labeling, Linking, & Media

Showcase	Yes	No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?	○
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?	○
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?	○
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?	○
4.2. Does your blog have labels displayed in sidebar?	○
5.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):	---	---
"books" (plural) AND "reviews" (plural)	○
"essays" (plural) AND "portfolios" (plural, without "proto-")	○
"quickposts" (plural, with no space between quick and posts)	○
"links" (plural) AND "media" (plural)	○
"movies" (plural) AND "websites" (plural)	○
"brainstorms" (or "brainstorming"), "essay prep.," AND "free-writing" (or "free-writes")	○
4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?	○
How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts? _24_ other labels attached to three or more posts	---	---
Which labels, and to how many posts each? Please list those labels instead of www, xxx, yyy..., and list numbers of posts instead of n, m, o... (in parentheses), below. abroad (41) classes (20) everyday (75) exercises (7) families (20) favorites (7) foods (31) friends (13) hobbies (5) Holidays (15) introduction (3) Japanese (7) languages (25) leisures (3) lists (8) memories (5) opinions (20) outlines (4) people (6) photos (50) seasons (14) speaking (5) studies (28) tests (6)	---	---
4.3. Links & media	---	---
4.3.1. Does your blog include photos or other graphics?	○
Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?		○
How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? _31_ posts including photos or other graphics	---	---
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?	○
How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links? _1_ posts including three or more links (including this portfolio!)	---	---
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?	○
How many of your blog posts this semester include other media? _2_ posts including other media	---	---
What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here: YouTube	---	---
What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yy.mm.dd) for reference. I'm sorry, but I produced none.	---	---

4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.

1. To emphasize particular words related to the main points in each post, I changed the size and colors of those words.
2. I always tried to share my own opinions on book reviews' posts.
3. I included more space in each post than before, in order to make them easy to see.

5.0. Additional reflections on your blog and your writing on it

Please feel free to include reflections on both spring and fall semester work, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, and reflections).

• Sudden homework(essays) was a little tough to complete by the due, after we were told about those essays just on Wednesday.
• The set number of posts in a week seemed to be too many.
• However, I was used to working on my blog in fall semester!
  

6.0. Advice and suggestions for yourself, your peers, and your successors

• To reach the norm of 15,000 words, the key is your efforts during summer vacation!
• You had better use easy phrases, so that others can understand what you write.
• To make your blog interesting and informative, it is a good idea to write about your opinions or the unique traditions and culture of Japan.
  

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1. This portfolio template derives from the templates for Writing IIIc and Writing IVc portfolios (2007-08), and Writing III, §§1a & 1c (Fall, 2008).
2. Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
   
3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derives from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
   

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MR2-01: "Mrs. Doubt" ― Live with Love and Humor ☆

In this movie, we can see a family’s drama. The story is sad but really emotional and heartwarming, even humorous in some parts. In this review, I would like to share you all about the most impressive things for me. I like his humor and love for children. Now, let’s focus on these qualities!

I would like to explain the plot a little bit. He is the so humorous father that he and his children had really enjoyed their family life together. Even when children were depressed, he could encourage them and make them feel better. The children obviously needed their father mentally and emotionally. Unfortunately, their mother decided to get a divorce from her husband. It was because she had felt so much stress, and her emotion had been so hurt. He and his wife had not communicated well. His wife had not felt his love to her, and she cried in her bed almost every night. However, the divorce did not solve their problem.

He was separated from his children and felt that he would lose his sanity. His eagerness for children made him to become disguised in woman’s clothes, so that he could see his children. It is just, ‘do everything’! He must be regarded as a crazy man, but this is a true parent! I felt so.

The most favorite point about him is humor! He was a dubber, and his specialty was to play with various voices. His children really enjoy playing with him, and his reading with various voices was so exciting. That’s why he could delude his wife with woman’s appearance and voice and take care of his own children after the divorce. Of course, he was so sad and depressed after the divorce, but his humor and aggressiveness helped him to deal with it in a practical way. He did not miss the chance of seeing his children. He could also laugh away his failure. This point is a great encouragement for me. If I get depressed with friendship or any other things, I want to stay positive. I also felt it is important to act practically, not to keep regretting about or cry over what has already happened.
　　
I think all viewers can feel his good qualities and get a lesson from this movie respectively. In my case, I could see the importance of living with love and humor every day! I am sure that I can become a stronger girl, if I cultivate humor especially. If not, I may keep staying depressed and miss many chances. Besides, it is just a waste of my time and energy! I want to stay cheerful and live through my days!

[452 words]

Outline for MR!

●Intro
　　　　　Show main points briefly
　　　　　　＊Focus two qualities of the hero
　　　　　　　　　・Love for children
　　　　　　　　　・Humor

●Body
　　　　　Treat the main points deeply
　　　　　　＊How he shows his love for children
　　　　　　＊How humor supports him in problems

●Conclusion
　　　　　Summarize all main points
　　　　　　＊Why those qualities are important
　　　　　　＊Refer to the influence on me

[50 words]

Free-writing 2: Family

This movie also shows us the important family is. I feel the importance of it every day!

I am a only child, so I think I have a strong tie with my parents especially. I do not have any brother or sister, but I have parents, who know me, listen to me, give advice to me, spend a good time with me! I really appreciate!

Actually, however, I have been thinking lately that I have to become independent gradually. To be honest, it is not easy, I think. But I can be secure, because they must keep their eyes on me.

I have never doubted their love to me, and I know I am a very happy girl!

[118 words]
Total of October = 3870 words

Free-writing1: humor

This movie shows us how important the humor is!

I felt the father's aggressiveness although he was so sad when his wife decided to get a divorce from him actually. He has a great humor before the divorce, but he could stay positive even after that. I think he could do that, because of his humor!

It is important for us too in order to face difficulties, enrich our life, and cope with stress.I think I am too serious in many cases and feel stress which is not needed, so I find the importance of cultivating humor. I got an encouragement from this movie!

[106 words]

List of themes in Mrs.Doubt!

The theme and impressive phrases in this movie are...

Love in a family

Smiles of children, wife, and husband

Tears of husband and wife

Changes in relations

Parents' love to children

Don't take away my children!

Near hysterical with love for children

Do everything!

Children's need of parents

Make children smile

Need of husband and wife

+ Humour

This movie also has scenes which evoke a laugh, but it handles really important problems, doesn't it?

[77 words]

Total here = 3646 words

Movie: Mrs.Doubt!

I watched a movie, "Mrs. Doubt" with my friends in our library last Friday. It was a little funny but impressive. I had thought it much funnier before I watched it, but it was so impressive in that it shows the father's love to his children. He did every thing he can do, and he seems to be odd, even strange.

I think this movie emphasizes the love in a family. It is because he himself said that as long as there is love, they are connected, in the movie. The parents do all things for children without regard to themselves. I feel that in case of my parents too.

It is really regrettable that he and his wife divorced. Except for that, this movie is really heartwarming.

[129 words]

MR= Bowling for columbine =

Today, I would like to talk about movie which I had to see for a class. The teacher requires us to see movies and write reviews about each one.

The first of them was "Bowling for Columbine". It is a documentary film by Michael Moore about American society where guns flood out.

In the United States, the number of victims in cases with guns reaches 11127. In Canada, which is next to USA, there also many guns, but the number is 165, which is much less than that of USA. Besides, there are other differences. Canadian people do not lock their doors. Michael Moore can not believe it, because he is from USA. Although there is a lot of factors thought of, he especially analyses that mass medias make American people fear others. Their reports and news exaggerate when black people commit a crime or gun affairs happen. As a result, American people get afraid of the black and others and fear living in American society, which has a lot of immigrants.

I did not know that pins of bowling are used in a training of American armies, and the reason is that the shape is similar to that of humans. It is very terrible, isn't it? The criminals of the case at Columbine high school are said to have played bowling just before they acted. However, I do not think that bowling is a factor of the crime. It is a popular sport in the world, and most of people do not think a pin is a person. I shudder to think many cases of guns happen. I felt the seriousness of this problem.

[276 words ― total 9634 words]

~LAPUTA: The Castle in the Sky~

I like the movie, "LAPUTA: The Castle in the Sky" since my early childhood. I like it now too, and so my parents do. I bet that you have seen it too. As the important feature of it, I think that there are many great lines or speeches, and this point makes it interesting.

I like the heroes. Sheeta is a so brave and thoughtful girl. At last, she saves the world from a plot of a bad man, Musca. Besides, as to another hero, Pazu is a very obedient boy, and he always makes a studious effort when he faces to every difficulty. I think that these two characters are a good assorted pair. Its story is so touching and moving. I do not lose interest in it. I intend to see it again!

[135 words ― total 8869 words]

MR1-1: How to built a good friendship

　I saw the movie “Shrek” and consider about one point that how Shrek’s feelings change and a friendship is built.
　First of all, I would like to introduce the characters which appear in this story.
　Of course, the most important character in this story is Shrek. He is a green ogre and his life style (for example, his foods or taking bath) is so disgusting for others, so people who scare him try to catch him. However, they can never do that, because he is so strong. However, he has a very delicate feeling, which does not appear in his appearance. He is hurt by being called ‘monster’ by others. He thinks that others hate him, so he feels it difficult to accept someone who comes to him, and he always threatens and sweeps others away.
　The second character is Donkey. He is talkative and cheerful, and he likes singing, humming, and joking. He is kind and tenacious especially when he tries to make friends with Shrek. He never gives up, how strict Shrek tells to get away. He becomes a good friends and a partner of Shrek.

　The third is Fiona. She is afraid of the sunset, because her appearance changes then. In the daytime, she is a beautiful princess, but she becomes a green ogre like Shrek. She thinks that it is because she was put under a curse by a witch and believes that she will be free from it by a kiss of a man who is fated to marry her.
　The fourth is Dragon. She is a female dragon which emits fire. She confines Fiona in her castle.
　The fifth is a lord. (His name is Fawkward or something like that.) He rules over a country where Shrek lives, and wants to marry Fiona.
There are also minor characters, and they are a dragon, the gingerbread man, small men, Cinderella, and so on.
　I would like to refer to the plot too. One day, a lord ejects characters of fairy tale in his kingdom and makes them go to a swamp where Shrek lives. Shrek wants them to go back, so he decides to meet the lord, and Donkey follows him. Shrek demands of him that he should give their lands back to them. The lord admits it on condition that Shrek goes to the dragon’s castle in order to rescue the princess Fiona and bring her back. It is because he wants to marry her. Shrek and Donkey go to the castle together and cooperate to rescue Fiona from a dragon. On the return road, Shrek fraternizes with her and gives his heart to her. He decides to give a declaration of love to her, but accidentally, they misunderstand each other. However, the lord and Fiona begin to take an oath at their wedding; Shrek bursts into there and tells her that he loves her. Donkey advises him to do so out of kindness. In the end, Shrek marries her. He has become positive and cheerful by then.
　The main point that I noticed is that how to built a good friendship. Underlined sentences in the upper paragraphs are relative to this point.
　At first, he was a kindhearted internally, but he could not be kind to others and accept other’s kindness. He could not break with a view that it is impossible that someone likes him. When Donkey came to him and tried to become his friend, at least he must not have felt bad. At first, he rejected Donkey, but gradually a friendship was established. I think it is because he could feel that Donkey liked him. When a misunderstanding appeared between Shrek and Fiona, he got into his bad habit of thinking again. He thought Fiona must dislike him. Seeing Shrek through this story, I thought that it is very important to be positive in relationships with others, not negative. However from Donkey, I learned that I should come in contact with others in a friendly way, even when I am not in good with others. If I try to do so, it becomes usually possible that she feels good, at least not bad. I was encouraged to strive to built and improve friendships. I felt the frienship between Shrek and Donkey was a great one.


[718 words ― total 4069 words]